Need FUll time job ASAP
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Need FUll time job ASAP
Hi, this is Kevin using my buddy Eric account to post a thread for work. If anyone out there know of any opening, please let me know. I'm looking for help desk/technical support position. I 'm also open to other entry level position.
Kevin M. Zhang
kevinminzhang@hotmail.com
(415) 845-9188
http://dai.sfsu.edu/003/photo/
Dear Hiring Manager,
If you have computer needs or concerns and would like to operate your network system more effectively, my credentials will be of interest. Allow me to introduce myself: A technical support/network administrator with 5 years of experience in a help desk technical support environment. I offer a blend of expertise in networking technology, technical system administration and support. I believe that my qualifications will make a valuable and immediate contribution to the operations of your company.
The following includes some highlights of my qualifications:
* Assisted in building a new small network with Windows 2000 server that connected to four other Bay Area offices with PIX firewall.
* Supported and administrated over 80 users in Window and Exchange 2000 network environment from group policy, to security, and mailbox limit.
* Proficiency in setting up, troubleshooting, repairing, and maintaining numerous peripherals and networks that includes printers, print servers, switches, firewalls, routers, VPN, DSL modems)
* Configure and maintain a backup system with Veritas Backup Exec 8.6 and HP robotic auto loader to backup the Exchange email server, file server and server system state.
* Exceptional communicative abilities with the demonstrated capacity to train and mentor end users on various systems and business applications;
* Documentation of comprehensive network configurations from routers, servers, firewalls to end user support call through Track It 6.0.
* Comprehensive training and expertise in help desk support environment providing various levels of technical support to end users;
* Extensive experience in working alongside with end users and customers through years of experience in various industries in understanding their needs and assisting them with their questions or problems;
* Technical proficiency in numerous platforms, network protocols and administration tools;
* Exceptional communicative abilities with the demonstrated capacity to train and mentor end users on various systems and business application;
* Experience and strong interest in web development and design utilizing knowledge of numerous languages and software;
* Highly goal-oriented, detail-oriented and result-oriented to ensure deliverance of a desired and effective outcome;
* Proficiency in setting up, troubleshooting, repairing and maintaining numerous peripherals and networks.
In addition, I offer outstanding organizations skills, which have proven to be a critical asset in ensuring that network protocols and peripherals operate effectively and efficiently. These qualities, combined with my dedication, tireless work ethic, and enthusiasm to learn would have a positive impact to the operation in a company.
I would be very grateful for your review of my enclosed resume. If you know of anyone who might be looking for someone with my background, please contact me through e-mail or phone. Or if you have any suggestions as to where I should direct my search, I would very much appreciate your input and advice.
Thank you for your time.
Best regards,
Kevin Zhang
Kevin M. Zhang
kevinminzhang@hotmail.com
(415) 845-9188
http://dai.sfsu.edu/003/photo/
Dear Hiring Manager,
If you have computer needs or concerns and would like to operate your network system more effectively, my credentials will be of interest. Allow me to introduce myself: A technical support/network administrator with 5 years of experience in a help desk technical support environment. I offer a blend of expertise in networking technology, technical system administration and support. I believe that my qualifications will make a valuable and immediate contribution to the operations of your company.
The following includes some highlights of my qualifications:
* Assisted in building a new small network with Windows 2000 server that connected to four other Bay Area offices with PIX firewall.
* Supported and administrated over 80 users in Window and Exchange 2000 network environment from group policy, to security, and mailbox limit.
* Proficiency in setting up, troubleshooting, repairing, and maintaining numerous peripherals and networks that includes printers, print servers, switches, firewalls, routers, VPN, DSL modems)
* Configure and maintain a backup system with Veritas Backup Exec 8.6 and HP robotic auto loader to backup the Exchange email server, file server and server system state.
* Exceptional communicative abilities with the demonstrated capacity to train and mentor end users on various systems and business applications;
* Documentation of comprehensive network configurations from routers, servers, firewalls to end user support call through Track It 6.0.
* Comprehensive training and expertise in help desk support environment providing various levels of technical support to end users;
* Extensive experience in working alongside with end users and customers through years of experience in various industries in understanding their needs and assisting them with their questions or problems;
* Technical proficiency in numerous platforms, network protocols and administration tools;
* Exceptional communicative abilities with the demonstrated capacity to train and mentor end users on various systems and business application;
* Experience and strong interest in web development and design utilizing knowledge of numerous languages and software;
* Highly goal-oriented, detail-oriented and result-oriented to ensure deliverance of a desired and effective outcome;
* Proficiency in setting up, troubleshooting, repairing and maintaining numerous peripherals and networks.
In addition, I offer outstanding organizations skills, which have proven to be a critical asset in ensuring that network protocols and peripherals operate effectively and efficiently. These qualities, combined with my dedication, tireless work ethic, and enthusiasm to learn would have a positive impact to the operation in a company.
I would be very grateful for your review of my enclosed resume. If you know of anyone who might be looking for someone with my background, please contact me through e-mail or phone. Or if you have any suggestions as to where I should direct my search, I would very much appreciate your input and advice.
Thank you for your time.
Best regards,
Kevin Zhang
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Originally posted by AzN121184
hey kevin i think on your technical page you spelled animated gif wrong. might want to check that out before someone else reads your spelling mistake.
hey kevin i think on your technical page you spelled animated gif wrong. might want to check that out before someone else reads your spelling mistake.
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Re: Need FUll time job ASAP part 1
A little critique to offer...
Your cover letter looks ok... not outstanding, nor does it stand out that much from other canidates...
Your cover letter looks ok... not outstanding, nor does it stand out that much from other canidates...
Originally posted by SF miami WRX
Dear Hiring Manager,
ditch that...
Should read "To whom it may concern" unless you have a specific name, then use it
If you have computer needs or concerns and would like to operate your network system more effectively, my credentials will be of interest. Allow me to introduce myself: A technical support/network administrator with 5 years of experience in a help desk technical support environment. I offer a blend of expertise in networking technology, technical system administration and support. I believe that my qualifications will make a valuable and immediate contribution to the operations of your company.
This section is good, but need work. It's too personal, too casual for an important topic, like why the hell should they hire you?
Don't use phrases like "I believe" that implies doubt on your part. You have to show your confidence.
Dear Hiring Manager,
ditch that...
Should read "To whom it may concern" unless you have a specific name, then use it
If you have computer needs or concerns and would like to operate your network system more effectively, my credentials will be of interest. Allow me to introduce myself: A technical support/network administrator with 5 years of experience in a help desk technical support environment. I offer a blend of expertise in networking technology, technical system administration and support. I believe that my qualifications will make a valuable and immediate contribution to the operations of your company.
This section is good, but need work. It's too personal, too casual for an important topic, like why the hell should they hire you?
Don't use phrases like "I believe" that implies doubt on your part. You have to show your confidence.
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part 2
A little critique to offer...
Your cover letter looks ok... not outstanding, nor does it stand out that much from other canidates...
Good luck finding work... be flexible.....
:banana:
Your cover letter looks ok... not outstanding, nor does it stand out that much from other canidates...
Originally posted by SF miami WRX
The following includes some highlights of my qualifications:
Be brief.... This should read
"Here are my qualifications:"
Or
"Summary of my skills:"
* Assisted in building a new small network with Windows 2000 server that connected to four other Bay Area offices with PIX firewall.
Be more specific here. Sounds like you did alot of remote management of your clients, that true? if so, what tools did you use to achieve the task?
* Supported and administrated over 80 users in Window and Exchange 2000 network environment from group policy, to security, and mailbox limit.
Again, be more specific here. So was this using Windows 2000 or windows NT? big differnce as you should know already. You need to mention those industy buzz words to capture their attention!
* Proficiency in setting up, troubleshooting, repairing, and maintaining numerous peripherals and networks that includes printers, print servers, switches, firewalls, routers, VPN, DSL modems)
proficient is such a nasty word on a resume or cover letter. If you have any experiance then your an expert..... right? Your the best, that's why they should hire you over someone else.
* Configure and maintain a backup system with Veritas Backup Exec 8.6 and HP robotic auto loader to backup the Exchange email server, file server and server system state.
* Exceptional communicative abilities with the demonstrated capacity to train and mentor end users on various systems and business applications;
* Documentation of comprehensive network configurations from routers, servers, firewalls to end user support call through Track It 6.0.
Need more detail. Were you assigned the task to document the network topology? Or was it something you initiated or expanded on?
* Comprehensive training and expertise in help desk support environment providing various levels of technical support to end users;
* Extensive experience in working alongside with end users and customers through years of experience in various industries in understanding their needs and assisting them with their questions or problems;
That is all good, but isn't this also a basic requirement for the job you want?
* Technical proficiency in numerous platforms, network protocols and administration tools;
Name the protocols your familar with. remember, Buzz words capture the attention of the corporate recuiter ( 'cuz their not technical and don't know what the hell their looking at )
* Exceptional communicative abilities with the demonstrated capacity to train and mentor end users on various systems and business application;
* Experience and strong interest in web development and design utilizing knowledge of numerous languages and software;
what languages, what tools..... etc...
* Highly goal-oriented, detail-oriented and result-oriented to ensure deliverance of a desired and effective outcome;
If you kick *** on the earlier bullet items get rid of this crap... They know your motivated, you want the job right?
* Proficiency in setting up, troubleshooting, repairing and maintaining numerous peripherals and networks.
no no no...
Your the best damm expert right?!?!?
rewrite this and use this bullet item in your introductory paragraph, or in the summary below.
In addition, I offer outstanding organizations skills, which have proven to be a critical asset in ensuring that network protocols and peripherals operate effectively and efficiently. These qualities, combined with my dedication, tireless work ethic, and enthusiasm to learn would have a positive impact to the operation in a company.
That was a decent paragraph, but get rid of "In addition". You need to be more "forceful" or consice in what your attempting to present in the cover letter.
I would be very grateful for your review of my enclosed resume. If you know of anyone who might be looking for someone with my background, please contact me through e-mail or phone. Or if you have any suggestions as to where I should direct my search, I would very much appreciate your input and advice.
Never, never ask a potential employer where to direct your job search!
If I was hiring manager, and I read that, I would never even look at your resume.
You get a monkey for that one
Thank you for your time.
Best regards,
Kevin Zhang
The following includes some highlights of my qualifications:
Be brief.... This should read
"Here are my qualifications:"
Or
"Summary of my skills:"
* Assisted in building a new small network with Windows 2000 server that connected to four other Bay Area offices with PIX firewall.
Be more specific here. Sounds like you did alot of remote management of your clients, that true? if so, what tools did you use to achieve the task?
* Supported and administrated over 80 users in Window and Exchange 2000 network environment from group policy, to security, and mailbox limit.
Again, be more specific here. So was this using Windows 2000 or windows NT? big differnce as you should know already. You need to mention those industy buzz words to capture their attention!
* Proficiency in setting up, troubleshooting, repairing, and maintaining numerous peripherals and networks that includes printers, print servers, switches, firewalls, routers, VPN, DSL modems)
proficient is such a nasty word on a resume or cover letter. If you have any experiance then your an expert..... right? Your the best, that's why they should hire you over someone else.
* Configure and maintain a backup system with Veritas Backup Exec 8.6 and HP robotic auto loader to backup the Exchange email server, file server and server system state.
* Exceptional communicative abilities with the demonstrated capacity to train and mentor end users on various systems and business applications;
* Documentation of comprehensive network configurations from routers, servers, firewalls to end user support call through Track It 6.0.
Need more detail. Were you assigned the task to document the network topology? Or was it something you initiated or expanded on?
* Comprehensive training and expertise in help desk support environment providing various levels of technical support to end users;
* Extensive experience in working alongside with end users and customers through years of experience in various industries in understanding their needs and assisting them with their questions or problems;
That is all good, but isn't this also a basic requirement for the job you want?
* Technical proficiency in numerous platforms, network protocols and administration tools;
Name the protocols your familar with. remember, Buzz words capture the attention of the corporate recuiter ( 'cuz their not technical and don't know what the hell their looking at )
* Exceptional communicative abilities with the demonstrated capacity to train and mentor end users on various systems and business application;
* Experience and strong interest in web development and design utilizing knowledge of numerous languages and software;
what languages, what tools..... etc...
* Highly goal-oriented, detail-oriented and result-oriented to ensure deliverance of a desired and effective outcome;
If you kick *** on the earlier bullet items get rid of this crap... They know your motivated, you want the job right?
* Proficiency in setting up, troubleshooting, repairing and maintaining numerous peripherals and networks.
no no no...
Your the best damm expert right?!?!?
rewrite this and use this bullet item in your introductory paragraph, or in the summary below.
In addition, I offer outstanding organizations skills, which have proven to be a critical asset in ensuring that network protocols and peripherals operate effectively and efficiently. These qualities, combined with my dedication, tireless work ethic, and enthusiasm to learn would have a positive impact to the operation in a company.
That was a decent paragraph, but get rid of "In addition". You need to be more "forceful" or consice in what your attempting to present in the cover letter.
I would be very grateful for your review of my enclosed resume. If you know of anyone who might be looking for someone with my background, please contact me through e-mail or phone. Or if you have any suggestions as to where I should direct my search, I would very much appreciate your input and advice.
Never, never ask a potential employer where to direct your job search!
If I was hiring manager, and I read that, I would never even look at your resume.
You get a monkey for that one
Thank you for your time.
Best regards,
Kevin Zhang
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As a General Manager and the one in charge of hiring, I was looking for the end of the letter about 1/2 way through it.
What was said about the buzz words can not be emphasised enough! If it's buzzing I look closer.
You use a semicolon to separate the bullets in the bottom half....either add them to the top ones or remove all together.
Words like proficient, skilled, and qualified make me frown...this means you have a basic understandin or have doen it before but may not remember it too well. Let us know what it is you can do and that you are damn good at it...it will get you hired and wont foster higher expectations once you are hired...just keeps the resume out of the round file if you know what I mean.
So if it were shorter and more direct I would most likely keep it in the "to-call" pile.
--Robb
What was said about the buzz words can not be emphasised enough! If it's buzzing I look closer.
You use a semicolon to separate the bullets in the bottom half....either add them to the top ones or remove all together.
Words like proficient, skilled, and qualified make me frown...this means you have a basic understandin or have doen it before but may not remember it too well. Let us know what it is you can do and that you are damn good at it...it will get you hired and wont foster higher expectations once you are hired...just keeps the resume out of the round file if you know what I mean.
So if it were shorter and more direct I would most likely keep it in the "to-call" pile.
--Robb
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Originally posted by itwrx
College Degree?
College Degree?
I would much rather hire someone who has had experience in a real job than someone fresh out of school. If you have what they call "equivilant experience" they will overlook the schooling.
Not only has this proven true for myself, but I learned it from a recruiter from IBM at a job fair I went to.
Also, when submitting a resume it seems standard to place education at the top. This no loner applies. A majority of big name companies as well as others will skip this section and look straight to what you have done, and what interests you have outside of work. Then if they have you tied with some other candidate(s) they will use education to refine their choices.
--Robb
Kevin,
Could you email me your resume so I can forward it to my HR person? I work for a software comp. here in SF and we are just about to hire another MIS help desk person. All I can do is get your resume in to HR. Times are tough, we have experienced developers working as tech. support people. But anyway, best of luck to you!
email to: macao_friend"at"yahoo.com
BTW, anyone work for the video games industry? How come it's so damn hard to get in?
Could you email me your resume so I can forward it to my HR person? I work for a software comp. here in SF and we are just about to hire another MIS help desk person. All I can do is get your resume in to HR. Times are tough, we have experienced developers working as tech. support people. But anyway, best of luck to you!
email to: macao_friend"at"yahoo.com
BTW, anyone work for the video games industry? How come it's so damn hard to get in?
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Thank you macao friend for the help. Is there any update?
Does anyone else have other opening besides IT?
Does anyone else have other opening besides IT?
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